tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979283022035486862.post8278903558128144343..comments2022-10-22T13:51:03.364+01:00Comments on Lewis Maddison- BA (Hons) Computer Animation Arts: Final Story Idea: Forgot to Upload EarlierAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13878141889750363571noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979283022035486862.post-16352055912540566772015-02-01T17:06:46.319+00:002015-02-01T17:06:46.319+00:00I was considering whether I should drop the mother...I was considering whether I should drop the mother or not, as I realized that she has nothing really to do with the story so now that you have said that ill go ahead. I like the Idea of the cycle repeating, over and over. Sort of inescapable loop. Ill make a few changes then get started with the rest of the work. Thanks for the Help, I'm sure ill find you on Monday and seek more advice. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13878141889750363571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8979283022035486862.post-82440925984056714462015-02-01T12:31:27.178+00:002015-02-01T12:31:27.178+00:00Hi Lewis,
Nicely atmospheric - but I think you co...Hi Lewis,<br /><br />Nicely atmospheric - but I think you could speed things up; so, just have the two kids arriving at the circus, drop the mother character, she doesn't serve a function particularly... in terms of your ending, I think the scariest thing would be to suggest that this circus/kidnap/horror scenario just keeps playing out over and over - so consider setting up a structure where the audience gets a sense of an inescapable loop - so it ends as it begins, with new victims etc. Think of your circus as like some giant basking shark just moving through reality sucking up children as if they were plankton - some cosmic, unstoppable predator... you see, it seems to me as if you're story isn't about the two children, it's about the concept of the circus, so the story shouldn't 'end' with the fate of the children. but continue endlessly like some nightmare...tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com